I changed Mr Mitnick to Some People Need Dying to hopefully the last stop on its journey Murder is Exhausting.
It's an Albert Camus quote. Then I was fortunate enough to find an illustration that worked really well for it.
And that's the whole story.
I suspect I will remove it from BN where it has done nothing ever and put it on Kindle Select for those measly 5 free days. After that if none of it works, and I somehow figure out another description, I will give up until the next possible fix comes to me. It's a cute book but fill in your generic explanation of why some things catch and others don't. If vampires flew out of the mission belfry, I'm sure it would do better. But that ain't happening.
Here's the revised blurb
The Mitnicks come from the clothing industry in New York City. It’s not exactly the high fashion trade, but close. Berry did go to Paris and work for some of the renowned couturiers to learn more but when she designs, the clothes tend to be a little off-market for anyone in the real world to wear. Who’s going to wear an evening gown with one wing sticking out of the back? No one, that’s right. So Berry packs up her sewing machine, at 27 sort of a failure at what she thought was her life, and comes to live with her father on a ranch in the beautiful central coast of California. Immediately there's a murder. And a handsome, irritable sheriff, a cute blacksmith and a group of older women Berry calls a harem chasing her father. If she hadn’t been involved in a murder before, maybe Berry could ignore it and let Sheriff Mark Fernandez do his job without input from her. But she knows what it’s like to never learn who killed someone she loves, and vows not to let it happen this time. As everyone knows, anyone who kills once, is willing to kill again to keep the truth buried and Berry is getting just too close for anyone’s comfort.
What can you learn from this? Don't be reluctant to change things around if they don't work. If you believe in the book, set aside some time from your new project and tinker. Give it time to work. Don't be impatient but do be realistic. Do the best you can with it and then let it go. Things will change in the future. More readers will come onboard. Maybe something you are writing now will bring readers to you and then this book will be discovered. Maybe it will never work. But maybe you'll find a niche audience for it. Don't despair. Don't dwell on it. Keep moving forward.